WALT: Use punctuation correctly and write in the first person.
In QEll there was a new swimming pool and I was going today! I decided to bring my dog Pip.
She was all so hyperactive. They started letting animals into the pool for some reason, but I still thought it was a good idea. We arrived at the swimming pool and Pip was barking like mad! But luckily I shushed her down just like a mother would. Everyone was screaming and laughing like a pack of hyenas, I always thought Pip was a boarder collie. The pool was so light and big! They must have spent a lot of money on this, I thought. I ran up to the counter like a racing horse. Every wall and carpet were white and black and I was surprised to see that. I came with my mum and Izzy, Izzy is my friend from school. We play together most of the time. We both got a doughnut floaty and rushed up stairs to the hydroslide, I was exploding with excitement! The green light flashed and off we went, we twisted and turned and it suddenly became black like a thousand nights. We screamed! We saw a beam of sunlight popping out of the tunnel, we were shocked to see the light, it was like we had been trapped underground for years. We burst out like a bolt of lightning!
